The Novel Help Thread

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Any advice on show-not-tell? Like, show a small example or give some tips? I'm so bad at that.

give an example of place and or thing -thanks-

xMoonlight_Maniax wrote:

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Any advice on show-not-tell? Like, show a small example or give some tips? I'm so bad at that.

I've got an example for you:

If you have a character who is mad, don't just say "he was mad." Show us by telling us that heat rose to his face, his hands balled into fists, and his breathing quickened. Have him yell. Etc.

Or, if it is storming, don't just say "it was storming." Say something like "black clouds covered the sky and every few seconds it would flash with lightning, accompanied by huge booms that were thunder." Or something like that, that was actually a quite craptastic example.

Nah Novel that was a good way of putting it.


I'm more interested in giving you an example your needing though. Tell us what your stuck on with telling and i'll try to help

Alright, so I got this book in the making called "Althelia"

Alright. What do you need help with? (By the way, cool title.)

tell us about it! we all need to know!!!!

-gets on knees and begs-

Thank you Novel. =^^=

Alright, well, what its basically about is this Junior in High School Named Althelia Marx who is pretty normal, just super smart. When Halloween rolls around though, things start happening. She starts being attacked by an unknown force. No one believes her. Not her teachers, not her father, or her grandfather [mother died in labor with her, grandmother died when 3 months, so grandfather moved in with Althelia and his son] but her friend Gerard and her are on the case to find this force. But when he gets involved, he starts getting hurt as well so they are basically hunting a ghost that isn't there because this ghost is Althelia's mirror reflection that got out by breaking the glass in her bathroom mirror, named Unthelia who wants to kill Althelia and basically trap her in the mirror and take over her life.

Any more ideas? Things to add? Comment them!

um..How about when she is stuck in the mirror it like an alternate world(But not like in the movie Mirrors becuase evrything being wroten backwards is not scary just annoing)
and while shes in there she finds this ghost weakness like somthing in that world Hint,Hint:another mirror.
But why restricte the antogenist to mirrors.to make it phycologicoly scrary it should play on a human weakness EX: Fready crouger

List of examples:
*Cake
*Bacon
*Water (Elements also work well)
*Darkness(Way to over done SKIP)
*Day and night cycles or a pesific time EX Midnight

And does this ghost have any oter powers like Posestion,make you here voices(Like me)
AND PLEASE I can't strease this ENOUGH but make the antagonist have some kind of personality The boogyman is not that scary if you have a light . An antagonist is scary if it seems that at one it WAS human.It brings a lot of disterbing questions like the clasical WHO,WHAT,WHY,and HOW

Don't fall into the pitfalls of making 2D Villans or you might end up like twilight and THAT is scary

PS:Can you beleive that I never wrote anything before my expertise surprises ME. :3

-.- cake....bacon....?

wow mike.

anyway, yeah do like he says. Make sure you have more depth to your characters AND instead of saying the ghost wants to bring her to the mirror realm, don't just leave it like that. Have her WANT to go there eventually. Like that is the only way to defeat it is by joining it. have the ghost's weakness it's own realm.

put underlining emotions besides hatred and evil in the mirror ghost. but not too much. according to humans the mirror people aren't human.