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jes a.k.a woot Grabbing the Pencil
Posts : 44 Join date : 2010-01-23 Age : 29
| Subject: some potry from today Thu Jan 28, 2010 3:01 pm | |
| so first of please feel free to critic and input your ideas they dont really have names eiher i can never come up with good ones -i wish you were here, I want you to hole e,through the good, the bad when im up, when im down, but your far away and hearing your voice is a treat, your voice is what pulls me thought till i see you next | |
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Dark_Spinning_Fairy Following the Cruse of Muse
Posts : 187 Join date : 2009-10-24 Age : 28 Location : Wishing To Be In [His] Arms..., West Virginia
| Subject: Re: some potry from today Thu Jan 28, 2010 3:07 pm | |
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fleamailman Treat yourself to some milkshakes, you've made it!
Posts : 995 Join date : 2010-01-23
| Subject: Re: some potry from today Thu Jan 28, 2010 3:35 pm | |
| ("...it's coming along..." said the goblin) | |
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| Subject: Re: some potry from today Thu Jan 28, 2010 3:36 pm | |
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Dark_Spinning_Fairy Following the Cruse of Muse
Posts : 187 Join date : 2009-10-24 Age : 28 Location : Wishing To Be In [His] Arms..., West Virginia
| Subject: Re: some potry from today Thu Jan 28, 2010 3:39 pm | |
| I think its really uberly good | |
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jes a.k.a woot Grabbing the Pencil
Posts : 44 Join date : 2010-01-23 Age : 29
| Subject: Re: some potry from today Mon Feb 01, 2010 12:54 pm | |
| thanks guys and ya i agree it does need som work buuutttt it was a impromptuu kinda thing hah | |
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Sage Mentor of Creative Being
Posts : 143 Join date : 2010-01-21 Location : Overseer's Cloud
| Subject: Re: some potry from today Mon Feb 01, 2010 1:50 pm | |
| revise revise revies!!!!!!!
see, even i do it .....^^^ | |
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Sage Mentor of Creative Being
Posts : 143 Join date : 2010-01-21 Location : Overseer's Cloud
| Subject: Re: some potry from today Mon Feb 01, 2010 2:47 pm | |
| oh, also jess, don't forget to increase your diction.
now you will sound smartzzzzz@@@!!!! | |
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jes a.k.a woot Grabbing the Pencil
Posts : 44 Join date : 2010-01-23 Age : 29
| Subject: Re: some potry from today Mon Feb 01, 2010 5:31 pm | |
| haha my vocabulary sucks xp
and revise? ok ill try XP
i wish you were with I want you to hold me every moment of our passing lives when im up, when im down, the rhythm of your voice gets me through the night so i might dream without so much fear getting to see you is all i dream about so come back to Ohio, you hold my heart
better joe? its on the spot haha how would u write it? | |
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Sage Mentor of Creative Being
Posts : 143 Join date : 2010-01-21 Location : Overseer's Cloud
| Subject: Re: some potry from today Mon Feb 01, 2010 5:42 pm | |
| on the spot is fun and can help measure your poetic IQ O.O"
^_^
imma post bump everyone.
BUMP
it seems good jesse, just keep practicing. | |
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jes a.k.a woot Grabbing the Pencil
Posts : 44 Join date : 2010-01-23 Age : 29
| Subject: Re: some potry from today Mon Feb 01, 2010 5:46 pm | |
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Sage Mentor of Creative Being
Posts : 143 Join date : 2010-01-21 Location : Overseer's Cloud
| Subject: Re: some potry from today Mon Feb 01, 2010 5:48 pm | |
| BUMP!
but yesh...keep doing your stuffs | |
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jes a.k.a woot Grabbing the Pencil
Posts : 44 Join date : 2010-01-23 Age : 29
| Subject: Re: some potry from today Mon Feb 01, 2010 5:48 pm | |
| haha okkaayyyy | |
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fleamailman Treat yourself to some milkshakes, you've made it!
Posts : 995 Join date : 2010-01-23
| Subject: Re: some potry from today Tue Feb 02, 2010 2:06 am | |
| i wish you were with I want you to hold me every moment of our passing lives when im up, when im down, the rhythm of your voice gets me through the night so i might dream without so much fear getting to see you is all i dream about so come back to Ohio, you hold my heart -jes a.k.a woot- | |
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jes a.k.a woot Grabbing the Pencil
Posts : 44 Join date : 2010-01-23 Age : 29
| Subject: Re: some potry from today Tue Feb 02, 2010 1:09 pm | |
| thanks for all the sweet pics fle mail man | |
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fleamailman Treat yourself to some milkshakes, you've made it!
Posts : 995 Join date : 2010-01-23
| Subject: Re: some potry from today Tue Feb 02, 2010 1:25 pm | |
| (nah, the goblin was cheating, he would read the poem first, visualize the setiment, and then run though the pictures he had stored, posting the one that most seemed like the poem, then he just said "...call me flea if you like, next poem please...") | |
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jes a.k.a woot Grabbing the Pencil
Posts : 44 Join date : 2010-01-23 Age : 29
| Subject: Re: some potry from today Tue Feb 02, 2010 5:36 pm | |
| hmmm ok heres one.....
Ill try to survive as long as I live, Make no promises ask forgiveness when you don't ask permission, Forget all your faults and focus on your up, Please don't worry for your my world I would be lost without you but it seems when push come to shove I'm not needed around So push me asidebut i wont stick around
i wrote this after me and my ex broke up.... and where sapposed to get back together :/ | |
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Reaper_HarrisPunk Following the Cruse of Muse
Posts : 146 Join date : 2010-01-28 Age : 28 Location : Hell
| Subject: Re: some potry from today Tue Feb 02, 2010 5:52 pm | |
| Aww im sorry D:..I'd come up wid a poem myself, but even if i could make one, it would be all depressing like T.T..And i learned not to do one about realitionships . | |
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jes a.k.a woot Grabbing the Pencil
Posts : 44 Join date : 2010-01-23 Age : 29
| Subject: Re: some potry from today Tue Feb 02, 2010 6:02 pm | |
| aww well i only write when im pissed or upset or confused and i was at the time i can only draw when im like depressed or really happy or bored haha | |
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fleamailman Treat yourself to some milkshakes, you've made it!
Posts : 995 Join date : 2010-01-23
| Subject: Re: some potry from today Wed Feb 03, 2010 2:19 pm | |
| . Ill try to survive as long as I live, Make no promises ask forgiveness when you don't ask permission, Forget all your faults and focus on your up, Please don't worry for your my world I would be lost without you but it seems when push come to shove I'm not needed around So push me aside but i wont stick around -jes a.k.a woot- | |
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jes a.k.a woot Grabbing the Pencil
Posts : 44 Join date : 2010-01-23 Age : 29
| Subject: Re: some potry from today Wed Feb 03, 2010 6:00 pm | |
| omg i LLLOOOOVVVEEEE that photo!!!! you have a real gift my friend of finding the picture within our hearts that inspire us truly | |
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fleamailman Treat yourself to some milkshakes, you've made it!
Posts : 995 Join date : 2010-01-23
| Subject: Re: some potry from today Thu Feb 04, 2010 2:14 am | |
| ("...the picture means little without your poem, but it can never be as you truly wish, for only one person can truly match their own poems now, whereas I can only interpret for you here..." said the goblin) | |
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jes a.k.a woot Grabbing the Pencil
Posts : 44 Join date : 2010-01-23 Age : 29
| Subject: Re: some potry from today Thu Feb 04, 2010 4:31 am | |
| yes but for you not being able to see into my mind and what inspires each poem you are wonderful flea | |
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fleamailman Treat yourself to some milkshakes, you've made it!
Posts : 995 Join date : 2010-01-23
| Subject: Re: some potry from today Thu Feb 04, 2010 7:42 am | |
| ("...I'll see if I can find other pictures for the "way cool pics" thread on this site, and if you see one you like borrow it, since that would make me happy then, in fact the more pictures we put there the better, this site gains by it, but also the contributors sharpen their eye too, who knows, when they are older it might come in handy, the eye can be used elsewhere..." remarked the goblin once more) | |
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jes a.k.a woot Grabbing the Pencil
Posts : 44 Join date : 2010-01-23 Age : 29
| Subject: Re: some potry from today Thu Feb 04, 2010 2:35 pm | |
| i agree you are a very wise goblin, if i may say so myself | |
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